That was so sad because John did not keep his promise to Elizabeth. I could never believe he would abandon her to the Replicators. That was a major flaw in Sheppard's character is season 4 -5. What kind of a HERO is that? I miss SPARKY. Loved your moments between my favorite couple. I like to pretend that they each heard what the other said.
That was so sad because John did not keep his promise to Elizabeth. I could never believe he would abandon her to the Replicators. That was a major flaw in Sheppard's character is season 4 -5. What kind of a HERO is that? I miss SPARKY. Loved your moments between my favorite couple. I like to pretend that they each heard what the other said.
awwww, too cute :^)
That was so sweet! Oh you're great with these sweet lovely ideas!
nice adding in detailing of thoughts, but i'd still really like to see more detailing on the surroundings and of john and elizabeth themselves...sometimes you can do something as simple as brushing a strand of hair back or how light hits something and it'll bring your chapter to a whole new level. i'd still suggest a beta reader, this will again help with grammar, formatting, and characterization. i'd use scene breakers to break things up...since it doesn't read like a whole continous storyline, it looks more like there should be at least one scene break if not more. i did though really like the repetition with elizabeth and john wanting each other to stop putting them through thinking the other is dying.
awww...very sweet
Author's Response: Thanks. ^_^
Sweet fic. very nice
Author's Response: Aww..thank you mew! I'm glad you liked it. ^_^