That was very well done. I think you captured the essence of a SPARKY relationship. Truly enjoyed this story. Excellent and believable characters.
Glad to see a happy ending.
Author's Response: Thankyou so much. I'm glad you liked it!
Ha, I'm back. :) You've definitely improved. You should be very proud of yourself. I'm not too picky on how they are a bit out of character, but it's great. Keep going, I'm eager for the last chapter now. :) *salute* s
Author's Response: I was wondering when i would hear from you again =).Thankyou for reviewing sorry about the out of character thing i will have to watch a bit of stargate atlantis again. The last chapter is up it isnt a big bang but i hope you enjoy it!
It was a good story and you had me
hooked. i was sad to see it end so soon. I was hoping for a follow up scene after Carson treated Elizabeth.
Author's Response: Dont worry its not finished quite yet I'll have the next chapter up soon hopefully. And thankyou so much for reviewing!!
This is awesome
Author's Response: thankyou hopefully i will put up another chapter soon. thankyou thankyou thankyou for reviewing it. =)
I can see where you're going with this first chapter. The plots fantasic, no doubt. But it's the small things that take out the most of you're story. I do believe some constructive criticism is needed. Yes, you may be thinking, 'Oh God, no...' but this will indeed help you in story writing. 1. You need to brushed up on your punctuation, grammar skills. There is clearly room for improvement. Try using commas, fullstops and Capital Letters more appropriately. 2. SPEECH MARKS! This is seriously confusing the **** outta me. Sorry, but it is. Anyways, I'd like to see where you're taking this. Please hence my advice and use it accordingly. Thanks, and keep practicing. =) *salute*
Author's Response: Thank you for your advice i will definately take it on board and try to improve it. Hopefully there will be more chapters put up in the next few days and thank you , thank you , thank you for reviewing it. =) P.S i dont mind constructive criticism. Thank you.